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I desperately needed to pee. I didn't want anyone to know. I walked out to the loo quietly. I shut the door and looked at the toilet seat. Someone had peed on it! I wiped it away carefully and sat down. Finally! I had been busting.

I began my business. But what was that? The warmth on my leg! I looked down. I had missed the bowl! Not again! I thought. I remembered everyone sitting back in class. They'd tease me forever. 

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 a) The building was on fire. Black smoke was coming out of the windows. People stood around watching. A fire truck was coming down the road. It was night time.

b) On the farm there was a farm truck. There were big cows. There were sheep. The grass was green. There were fences made from wire. The sun was hot.

c) The moon was in the sky. The stars were bright. The meteor flew past. The rocket was shiny. The universe was black and went on forever.